The room’s charge
Made two hearts
Skip beats,
Raised hairs
On arms.
Love forbidden;
Scandal of the century.
Lancelot couldn’t resist
Temptation-
Forever lost to Arthur’s queen.
Their passion ruined the
Kingdom-
But he had Guinevere.
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I find the story of Lancelot and Guinevere fascinating because it has it all: betrayal, forbidden love, and extreme risk. (I think being a trusted knight to the king and ‘stealing’ his queen is frowned upon and comes with a fair amount of risk!)
This is my response to Trifecta’s weekend challenge, which was to write 36 words which includes the words “charge,” “century,” and “lost.” If you want to read other responses, or give the prompt a try yourself, click on the tricycle picture to view Trifecta’s site. Have a great weekend!
I LOVE everything you write, but this one..wow. I adored it.
My own heart pounded.
GREAT JOB Janna.
(I too love that century and the stories that came out of it)
Thanks so much, Kir! You know, I almost forgot one of the words – I re-read it before publishing and realized I lost the word “lost.” Oops 🙂 I’m glad I’m not the only one fascinated by that time period.
Ooh,I love this!What a lovely piece of history to focus on!:-)
Thanks, Atreyee! When I saw ‘century’ I knew I wanted to write this 🙂 I’m curious what others have done – I’m sure I’ll have lots of reading to do this weekend.
Think Art, Gwen, and Lance are to the love triangle what Romeo and Juliet are to boy and girl from opposite sides of the tracks in love stories. It’s such a tru-ism that there are only so many stories, all told with local costume and color and staged in the locale of the story teller. Always interesting to see what you do with these word limited challenges, and especially with the proscribed words. Lovely.
Later…
You’re right, Coyotero – many stories are just variations of these. If done right, the retelling can still feel new and interesting. I wish I had more words here to finish their story (which is not happily ever after.) I guess in the interest of word count, they can hang on the triumphant moment in this poem 🙂
I appreciate you reading and sharing your thoughts on the poem. Always interesting to read your comments!
Intersting? I better go back and read my comment. It’s too early to be intersting. Thanks again for your post. I need to study your work more…get a grip on brevity.
Later…
It’s never too early to be interesting! Study my work…I don’t know about that…there’s much better material out there 🙂
But he had Guinevere. – LOVE!
Thanks, SuziCate!
This is terrific. I love how your worked in the words.
I appreciate you reading, Deana!
Well done, Janna.
A great love story, indeed.
Thanks, Nancy. It was quite the story, indeed!
I love the way you summed up such a huge love story in just 36 words. Well done!
Thanks, Nenna! I could’ve easily used 333 more words 🙂
Can’t help loving a good love story, Janna! Well summarized, my friend!
Thanks, Debbie! Their story is a fascinating/sad one.
clever, clever. Nicely done.
Thanks, Ann!
Interesting poem and use of the words given. You have a very talented thought process for words. It is always a pleasure to see what you write. Thank you
Thanks for the kind words, Sean. I’m glad you stopped by and enjoyed the poem!
One of the greatest love stories in 36 words…brilliant!
Wow, thanks, Maggie!
What a powerful final line – this is stunning Janna.
I’m glad that line stood out for you, GodGirl. Thanks for reading!
I love the myth of lancelot and gwen :). Great job!.
Thanks, Carrie! Their story is an intense one.
I love their love story. Always have! Perfect choice for this prompt!
Thanks, Gina! It probably would’ve been better to think of something original…but I couldn’t get them out of my head 🙂
I love Arthurian legend! This is so well done, I could feel shivers.
Thanks so much, Renee. I’m glad there are several others who are captivated by their story as much as I am!
Loved it!
Thanks, Mairzeebp!
The story of the perfect knight with human imperfections is always a captivating read. Loved this piece Janna.
Have a great weekend, Eric
‘Perfect knight with human imperfections’ – I like how you put that, Eric. Thanks for sharing your thoughts on the poem!
You make these look so easy, Janna. Then I read the requirements, and think, “What?!”
You’re funny, Patti! I will admit the weekend ones are tricky with the exact word count…the weekday ones have a bit more freedom. Either way, I like the aggravation, I mean, challenge 🙂 Thanks for reading!
Nice job
Thanks for reading, Patty!
It’s great. I am always fascinated by the story too.
I appreciate you stopping by, Becca!
Well done! Shining up an old tale and wrapping it a tiny little challenge!
Thanks, Rangewriter! I’m glad you stopped by 🙂
Forbidden love is very inspiring indeed, and I always loved this story too! Knights in shining armor…good stuff!
Yeah, he was the ultimate knight in shining armor! Their forbidden love came at a high cost. I’m glad you like the story too, Valerie…there seem to be many Camelot fans around these parts 🙂
ahhh, my namesake, the player. I like how you formatted this. well written, janna.
Well, he was a gutsy one, at least. Making a play for the queen isn’t the smartest move 🙂 Thanks for reading, Lance!
The girl is all that matters. 😉 I love this take on the tale!
Thanks, Draug! That pretty much sums it up- he got the girl (for a while, at least :))
love, love, love Arthurian tales . . . so much so that hubbymoose’s name IRL is Arthur. 🙂
How fun, Barbara! It’s funny, because several years ago when my older son was in first grade, he was into Magic Treehouse books. Morgan le Fay, Merlin and Arthur were all part of the series. I kind of enjoyed Jack and Annie’s adventures 🙂
I love this because it tells a whole story, and even though it’s a story we’ve heard before it feels new.
Thanks for linking up!
I’m so glad that this felt like “new”. I was concerned that by doing this subject, it would come off as just a summary.
Wonderful and I love the picture!!
Thanks, Linda! I liked that photo, too (thanks, Wikipedia :))
An amazing summation of the Lancelot/Guienevere story in only 33 words….I couldn’t have done it. Love the photo and the sense of desperate love your poem creates.
I appreciate your comment, Jennie! I’m glad you enjoyed the poem 🙂
This is gorgeous Janna! Love the intensity. Great use of the prompt words!
I’m glad you liked the poem, Suzanne. Their story was an intense one!
This is beautiful and the last line….ooh, it gave me a thrill. Love it!
I appreciate you reading, Ramshanasir!
I have always found Sir Lancelot super sexy but your last line nailed me… (no pun intended, I swear!). Oh, the knight in shining armor, who could resist that?! 😉
Hahaha! Great comment, Dana! I can see the appeal – there’s a certain attractiveness of a man who would risk the wrath of the king (and his life) for love 🙂
such a nice paraphrasing …. ! I simply love your writing Janna ! 🙂
Thank you so much, Shreya. I appreciate you taking time to read it!
Really enjoyed your re-telling – very touching.
Thanks, Sarah!
Yes, love and its cost. Great retelling!
Their love did come at great cost. Thanks for reading, Kymm!
Arthurian legend is ripe for parody. A great tale! Well done.
(Incidentally, have you ever watched BBC’s “Merlin”? Great show…) 😉
Thanks for stopping by, LTBG! I haven’t seen that BBC show…I’ll have to see if I can get it in my area.
enjoyed reading this – and like the italics at the end just the right amount of emphasis
Thanks, Unevensteven. I appreciate your comment!
I haven’t come across this legend in a long time, and this rendition made me smile–“But he had Guinevere.” How amazing you did this in 36 words!
Aw, thanks so much, Sandra! It was a challenging poem to do – getting an exact word count can be frustrating at times (but you know that, don’t you? :))
Very well done, Janna. Sigh…even then, personal interests put the greater good at risk.
Thanks, Imelda! Sometimes it serves us well to think outside ourselves.