Thin Ice

02-26 Icy Lake

From the middle of the frozen lake, you motion for me to join you.

I shake my head, certain you’re half insane.

You jump up and down.  “See?  It’s safe!”

I close my eyes and listen for cracking ice.  Safety is relative.  I keep my feet on solid ground and camouflage emotions well.  It’s safer this way.

I feel your hand through my coat sleeve and open my eyes.

“Don’t be scared.”

I succumb to persuasion with slippery uncertainty.  Years ago, trust and I parted ways; you are my only exception.

I believe you won’t leave me on thin ice.

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This is my take on the 100-Word Challenge hosted by Lance at My Blog Can Beat Up Your Blog.  This week’s song is “The Only Exception” by Paramore.

Anyone can join in, so check out his blog and add a 100-Word piece of your own!

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38 thoughts on “Thin Ice

  1. vishalbheeroo February 26, 2014 / 5:41 AM

    Inspiring and such a beauty to read, Jannat:)

    • jannatwrites February 26, 2014 / 9:02 PM

      Thanks for reading my 100-word story, Vishal!

  2. Debbie February 26, 2014 / 9:02 AM

    Awesome job, Janna! Trust is a tricky thing — violate someone’s trust once, and they might never trust you again (or anyone else, for that matter!)

    • jannatwrites February 26, 2014 / 9:04 PM

      Thanks, Debbie! Trusting is definitely risky 🙂

    • jannatwrites February 26, 2014 / 9:05 PM

      Thanks, Nancy – I’m glad you stopped by 🙂

  3. Kir Piccini February 26, 2014 / 10:37 AM

    oh I loved this, the chance of knowing you are safe even on the slippery slopes.
    it was beautifully written.

    • jannatwrites February 26, 2014 / 9:07 PM

      Thanks, Kir! You definitely ‘get’ the metaphor… trusting after being burned is like sliding on ice 🙂

  4. Sean February 26, 2014 / 11:26 AM

    I like this.Trust is an interesting thing. Once it is lost it is very hard to get back. There are times when trust is all you have. It brings to mind the new walk they have at the Grand Canyon, although I have not seen it, I’m not sure I would go out on it. Growing up, I would climb up a crevice in a mountain but wouldn’t climb up something man made.

    • jannatwrites February 26, 2014 / 9:09 PM

      Interesting, about the not trusting man-made structures. I remember when we had a bomb threat at a place I worked… I was relieved when they got the dogs in there to check out. I think they’re more reliable than people 🙂 Thanks for reading and sharing your comment, Sean!

  5. Carol Ann Hoel February 26, 2014 / 12:32 PM

    Ah, the exception. That one, the only one, today. Great story, Janna…

    • jannatwrites February 26, 2014 / 9:10 PM

      Thanks for taking time to read it, Carol Ann!

  6. newwhitebear February 26, 2014 / 1:11 PM

    think it’s safer to stay on the ground and did not venture out on the ice

  7. CRD February 26, 2014 / 1:18 PM

    I wonder if there’s a sequel to this post 😛

    Well written.

    Updated my blog. Do drop by.

    Cheers
    CRD

    • jannatwrites February 26, 2014 / 9:12 PM

      Well, none in the works right now, but who knows where inspiration will lead 🙂 Thanks for stopping by, CRD!

  8. Lance February 26, 2014 / 6:56 PM

    :safety is relative” – what a great interpretation of the song. tHanks for the 100

    • jannatwrites February 26, 2014 / 9:16 PM

      Thanks for always leaving a door open to join in the fun, Lance!

  9. Imelda February 26, 2014 / 7:49 PM

    Trusting takes courage. Nice story in 100. 🙂

    • jannatwrites February 26, 2014 / 9:23 PM

      Yes, it does, Imelda. Thanks so much for stopping by!

  10. pattisj February 26, 2014 / 9:56 PM

    Nicely done, Janna. I love the name of Lance’s blog!

    • jannatwrites February 27, 2014 / 10:14 PM

      Thanks, Patti! I’m glad you stopped by to read it!

  11. C.C. February 26, 2014 / 11:54 PM

    I’m so glad you were pulled in to try the 100 Word Song challenge. This is magnificent! All the implications inherent in the last line are so profound.

    • jannatwrites February 27, 2014 / 10:15 PM

      Thanks so much for your nice comment, C.C.! I appreciate you reading my story… it was fun to try out Lance’s challenge.

    • jannatwrites February 27, 2014 / 10:21 PM

      Thanks, Susan! I tried one once a few months ago, so it was nice to give it another go 🙂

  12. Deborah February 27, 2014 / 5:42 PM

    WOW! The connection between the dangers of thin ice in the physical sense and in the emotional sense are amazing. Trust is such a huge issue, and if we can find even ONE person that we can really trust, we might be willing to risk enough to discover possibilities. This is beautiful!

    • jannatwrites February 27, 2014 / 10:29 PM

      Thanks for reading it, Deborah! We’re vulnerable whether we’re physical treading on ice, or if we step out and allow ourselves to trust someone else.

  13. Tara R. February 27, 2014 / 8:40 PM

    A wonderful metaphor… “I believe you won’t leave me on thin ice.”

    • jannatwrites February 27, 2014 / 10:30 PM

      Thanks, Tara! The moment we decide to trust, we have to believe that we won’t be let down.

  14. Eric Alagan February 28, 2014 / 5:23 PM

    The ice held – until that last person got on 👿

    • jannatwrites February 28, 2014 / 8:15 PM

      Hehe – tragic, but also curiously amusing to imagine! Thanks for the chuckle, Eric (I like your ‘devilish’ sense of humor!)

  15. Sarah Ann March 3, 2014 / 11:20 AM

    I like how this develops. I think I’m with your cautious protagonist, but love the line, ‘Years ago, trust and I parted ways; you are my only exception.’ Sometimes it’s good to have the exception. 🙂

    • jannatwrites March 3, 2014 / 9:27 PM

      As long as the exception is a worthy one 🙂 Thanks for reading, Sarah Ann!

  16. Sandra March 11, 2014 / 5:59 PM

    Wow, must be some love and real trust. I’m not sure if I can do this, even if my own DH asked. But I probably wouldn’t let him go in the first place, ha!

    • jannatwrites March 11, 2014 / 10:04 PM

      Haha, I’d feel more comfortable on shore, Sandra!

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