From the middle of the frozen lake, you motion for me to join you.
I shake my head, certain you’re half insane.
You jump up and down. “See? It’s safe!”
I close my eyes and listen for cracking ice. Safety is relative. I keep my feet on solid ground and camouflage emotions well. It’s safer this way.
I feel your hand through my coat sleeve and open my eyes.
“Don’t be scared.”
I succumb to persuasion with slippery uncertainty. Years ago, trust and I parted ways; you are my only exception.
I believe you won’t leave me on thin ice.
This is my take on the 100-Word Challenge hosted by Lance at My Blog Can Beat Up Your Blog. This week’s song is “The Only Exception” by Paramore.
Anyone can join in, so check out his blog and add a 100-Word piece of your own!
Inspiring and such a beauty to read, Jannat:)
Thanks for reading my 100-word story, Vishal!
This was utterly brilliant! I LOVED this little story. Well done! ♥
Thanks so much for reading, Kathy!
Awesome job, Janna! Trust is a tricky thing — violate someone’s trust once, and they might never trust you again (or anyone else, for that matter!)
Thanks, Debbie! Trusting is definitely risky 🙂
Thanks, Nancy – I’m glad you stopped by 🙂
oh I loved this, the chance of knowing you are safe even on the slippery slopes.
it was beautifully written.
Thanks, Kir! You definitely ‘get’ the metaphor… trusting after being burned is like sliding on ice 🙂
I like this.Trust is an interesting thing. Once it is lost it is very hard to get back. There are times when trust is all you have. It brings to mind the new walk they have at the Grand Canyon, although I have not seen it, I’m not sure I would go out on it. Growing up, I would climb up a crevice in a mountain but wouldn’t climb up something man made.
Interesting, about the not trusting man-made structures. I remember when we had a bomb threat at a place I worked… I was relieved when they got the dogs in there to check out. I think they’re more reliable than people 🙂 Thanks for reading and sharing your comment, Sean!
Ah, the exception. That one, the only one, today. Great story, Janna…
Thanks for taking time to read it, Carol Ann!
think it’s safer to stay on the ground and did not venture out on the ice
I think so too, Newwhitebear 🙂
I wonder if there’s a sequel to this post 😛
Updated my blog. Do drop by.
Well, none in the works right now, but who knows where inspiration will lead 🙂 Thanks for stopping by, CRD!
:safety is relative” – what a great interpretation of the song. tHanks for the 100
Thanks for always leaving a door open to join in the fun, Lance!
Trusting takes courage. Nice story in 100. 🙂
Yes, it does, Imelda. Thanks so much for stopping by!
Nicely done, Janna. I love the name of Lance’s blog!
Thanks, Patti! I’m glad you stopped by to read it!
I’m so glad you were pulled in to try the 100 Word Song challenge. This is magnificent! All the implications inherent in the last line are so profound.
Thanks so much for your nice comment, C.C.! I appreciate you reading my story… it was fun to try out Lance’s challenge.
This is fantastic Janna!! I love it. 🙂 Welcome to the 100.
Thanks, Susan! I tried one once a few months ago, so it was nice to give it another go 🙂
WOW! The connection between the dangers of thin ice in the physical sense and in the emotional sense are amazing. Trust is such a huge issue, and if we can find even ONE person that we can really trust, we might be willing to risk enough to discover possibilities. This is beautiful!
Thanks for reading it, Deborah! We’re vulnerable whether we’re physical treading on ice, or if we step out and allow ourselves to trust someone else.
A wonderful metaphor… “I believe you won’t leave me on thin ice.”
Thanks, Tara! The moment we decide to trust, we have to believe that we won’t be let down.
The ice held – until that last person got on 👿
Hehe – tragic, but also curiously amusing to imagine! Thanks for the chuckle, Eric (I like your ‘devilish’ sense of humor!)
I like how this develops. I think I’m with your cautious protagonist, but love the line, ‘Years ago, trust and I parted ways; you are my only exception.’ Sometimes it’s good to have the exception. 🙂
As long as the exception is a worthy one 🙂 Thanks for reading, Sarah Ann!
Wow, must be some love and real trust. I’m not sure if I can do this, even if my own DH asked. But I probably wouldn’t let him go in the first place, ha!
Haha, I’d feel more comfortable on shore, Sandra!