Haiku – Like Trees

Forest sentries sway

Each stands together, alone.

Aspens know my heart.

Aspens in Apache-Sitgreaves Forest (AZ)
Apache-Sitgreaves National Forest (AZ)

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This haiku is brought to you by the Trifecta weekend writing prompt:

This weekend we’re asking you to harken back to your grade school days and write a haiku.  No word restrictions, just stick to the structure as defined below.  Haiku: an unrhymed verse form of Japanese origin having three lines containing usually five, seven, and five syllables respectively.

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I’m glad you stopped by.  I hope you have a beautiful weekend!

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96 thoughts on “Haiku – Like Trees

  1. Draug419 August 30, 2013 / 7:58 AM

    Very nature-y, just like a haiku should be. I like it!

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:26 AM

      Thanks, Draug. I’m glad you enjoyed the haiku.

  2. I Am Jasmine Kyle August 30, 2013 / 7:59 AM

    I always wonder if trees and plants have a way of communicating. Chemically or other wise.

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:27 AM

      I wouldn’t be surprised if they do, Jasmine. A language we can’t understand, no doubt!

      • I Am Jasmine Kyle August 30, 2013 / 1:37 PM

        🙂 I believe in FARIES TOO! (Not really)

        • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 10:00 PM

          Now fairies, that would be awesome!

        • I Am Jasmine Kyle August 31, 2013 / 5:03 AM

          I know right! I don’t even care if there mean.

  3. vishalbheeroo August 30, 2013 / 8:28 AM

    How I wish, I was able to write such beautiful Haiku. Jannat’s Haiku is like ice cream:)

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:28 AM

      You’re funny, Vishal 🙂 Your nice comment made me smile. Thanks for reading!

        • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:35 AM

          Well, thank you, Vishal. I feel like an imposter when I write “real” form poetry, so the compliments are hard for me to accept, I guess. I hope the the real poets don’t get offended at my attempts 🙂

        • vishalbheeroo August 30, 2013 / 9:39 AM

          You are not an imposter and poetry is the reflection of the mind, I feel. Lolz how do u define real poets coz we are all poets in some way or another:)

        • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 10:28 AM

          Yeah, I think most of us do have poetic thoughts, Vishal. I suppose I think of ‘real’ poets as those who study the and explore the different forms of poetry. I don’t do that 🙂

        • vishalbheeroo August 30, 2013 / 10:30 AM

          so true but u on ur way::)

        • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 10:32 AM

          Perhaps, if I tried harder 😛

  4. Joe Owens August 30, 2013 / 8:28 AM

    My favorite line was “Each stands together, alone”. This is so good.

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:28 AM

      Thanks, Joe! That was actually the first line I wrote (as I counted the syllables out on my fingers…)

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:29 AM

      Thanks so much for reading, Newwhitebear 🙂

  5. theinnerzone August 30, 2013 / 8:54 AM

    Aspens know my heart – a great line!

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:30 AM

      I’m glad you liked that line, Theinnerzone! (I read the re-write of your haiku and it’s still beautiful – nice job :))

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:31 AM

      Thanks, Jennifer. I love it when different lines speak to different people, as this haiku seems to be doing.

  6. Sean August 30, 2013 / 10:10 AM

    Very nice Haiku. Was this a past writing or did you just come up with it? I know, I’m being nosy. Aspens are pretty trees especially when there is snow covering them. Have a wonderful weekend.

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 10:31 AM

      Sean, I wrote this one this morning after reading the prompt and looking through my folder of “Unused blog photos”. I know it’s weird, but I keep of a folder of pictures that I’d like to share at some point, but don’t know what to do with them yet. I have a feeling I’ll take a bazillion pictures of snow…gotta make up for 25 years of desert winters 🙂

      • Sean August 30, 2013 / 1:51 PM

        you enjoy taking pictures so it is natural to have some time of organization for the pictures. I know I just usually dump them in a folder I create saying that I’ll go back through them or organize a bit more but never seem to find time to do that. I do know that it usually snowed 1 time a year in that area. Didn’t last very long and if you woke up late, you might miss it. You’ll like some of the shots you’ll get with snow and the different levels which you can play with so see different luminosity in the snow.

        • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:47 PM

          Snow is a new challenge I’m looking forward to. Well, photographing it…not so much driving in it 🙂 I don’t want to rush things, as I’m enjoying the rainy season right now!

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:44 PM

      Thank, Ivy…I appreciate you stopping by 🙂

  7. Quickstepp August 30, 2013 / 1:10 PM

    Very pretty! I love the forest!

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:45 PM

      I like the forest too, Quickstepp. I find it so peaceful.

  8. nrhatch August 30, 2013 / 3:04 PM

    Beautiful Haiku, Janna. Glad you had a chance to share your love of Aspens.

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:48 PM

      Thanks, Nancy! I don’t do haiku often, so it was a fun challenge.

  9. mielle August 30, 2013 / 4:21 PM

    This is lovely!!

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:53 PM

      Thanks, David! Your comment is encouraging. I like it when I’m able to combine photos with my writing.

  10. Debbie August 30, 2013 / 5:10 PM

    Lovely photo; lovelier verse, Janna!

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:54 PM

      Thanks so much, Debbie. Looking through photos for inspiration today, this one stood out for me.

  11. Diane Turner August 30, 2013 / 6:36 PM

    Love the photo and Aspens. I used to live where they were abundant. The twickling of the leaves in summer was the best part. Thanks for sharing your lovely verse, too.

    • jannatwrites August 30, 2013 / 9:57 PM

      There aren’t a lot of Aspens where I live, but on our drive, I did see a few clusters of them, so I told my husband I wanted to photograph the first group when we headed back to the main road. The area consists mostly of pines (predominately Ponderosas), so it was nice to get a photo that didn’t reveal that. “Twickling” – I like that description. I wish we could have spent more time around the trees so I could hear that. Maybe next time.

      I appreciate you stopping by and sharing your comment, Diane!

  12. Rob's Surf Report August 31, 2013 / 4:54 AM

    I love contradiction – “standing together, alone”. Very cool.

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:15 AM

      Thanks for reading, Rob! I’m glad you liked that line 🙂

  13. Bryan Ens August 31, 2013 / 7:04 AM

    Great haiku!

  14. Sandra August 31, 2013 / 9:08 AM

    Great showcase of nature in this haiku! The picture went so well with it, too.

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:16 AM

      Thanks, Sandra! (I actually wrote this for the photo :))

  15. debseeman August 31, 2013 / 9:24 AM

    Love your haiku and your choice to compare aspens symbiotic nature to a life of solitude surrounded by others is feels quite familiar.

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:17 AM

      It’s nice to know I’m not the only one who knows that feeling, Deb. Thanks so much for reading!

  16. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) August 31, 2013 / 9:41 AM

    The last line is a stunner, with great imagery to set the scene… yes this is great haiku…

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:17 AM

      Thanks, Bjorn. With your talent for poetry, I take this as a big compliment 🙂

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:18 AM

      Yes, yes, we are, SBWI. I appreciate you taking time to read it!

  17. Suzanne August 31, 2013 / 10:59 AM

    Beautiful, gorgeous, stunning! I love everything about this. 🙂

  18. Glynis August 31, 2013 / 11:39 AM

    Again, I’m with everyone else this was beautiful 8)

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:19 AM

      I’m glad you liked it, Glynis. I appreciate you stopping by!

  19. steph August 31, 2013 / 12:00 PM

    I can only echo the others. Lovely imagery. I’m a tree-hugger myself so any reference to them has my votes.

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:20 AM

      Trees are so beautiful, Steph. I’m glad you like them, too!

  20. freyathewriter August 31, 2013 / 2:59 PM

    This is so serene – the last line completes it beautifully.

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:20 AM

      Thanks, Freya! Haiku isn’t something I do very often, so it was a fun challenge.

  21. Lance August 31, 2013 / 3:14 PM

    airy, pretty, and touching

    well done

  22. Valerie August 31, 2013 / 3:35 PM

    Stands alone together-what a lovely thought! Nice work Janna!

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:22 AM

      Thanks, Valerie! Sometimes we are stuck within ourselves in the company of others, like the Aspens.

  23. Tina August 31, 2013 / 6:24 PM

    Aspens are such pretty trees. This is a perfect haiku!

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:22 AM

      Thanks, Tina! I like them, too. I will try to get back there in the winter, perhaps when it snows because they are pretty that way, too 🙂

  24. Miss Hannah August 31, 2013 / 9:33 PM

    Beautiful! I love love love the feelings trees bring!

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:23 AM

      Thanks, Miss Hannah! So glad you share my love of trees 🙂

  25. tobinoftheroad August 31, 2013 / 10:24 PM

    ‘Forest sentries.’ What a beautiful metaphor! Wonderful haiku.

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:23 AM

      Thanks, Tobin. I appreciate you taking time to read it!

  26. Gina September 1, 2013 / 8:17 AM

    “Each stands alone, together.” goes for many things. I liked the feel of this.

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 9:24 AM

      Thanks, Gina. It’s nice to know that some can relate to the sentiments of this 🙂

  27. agjorgenson September 1, 2013 / 9:32 AM

    “Aspens know my heart” rings true for me too. Love it.

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 11:07 PM

      Thanks so much, Allen! I like that you can relate to that line.

  28. Sarah Ann September 1, 2013 / 11:10 AM

    ‘Each stands together, alone’ so true and beautifully expressed.

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 11:08 PM

      I’m glad that line feels true for you too, Sarah Ann. I appreciate you taking time to read it!

  29. KymmInBarcelona September 1, 2013 / 2:31 PM

    Love the idea of trees knowing your heart. Great haiku!

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 11:16 PM

      Thanks, Kymm…I’m glad you enjoyed it!

  30. trifectawriting September 1, 2013 / 5:11 PM

    So lovely. This makes me want to go for a hike in the park. But if I do that, the new post might not get written. 🙂 Thanks for linking up. And thanks, as always, for your support for Trifecta. How you make time to comment on so many pieces each week boggles my mind, but we notice and appreciate it. xx

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 11:23 PM

      I know what you mean about things not getting done if you head out on a hike!

      It’s a pleasure reading each week. It’s getting harder to read everyone with so many entries, but I enjoy it, so do as much as I can. With my kids’ sports and scout activities ramping up, I may have to sit out responding/reading some challenges, but we’ll see how it goes 🙂

  31. Eric Alagan September 1, 2013 / 5:16 PM

    Like humans – together but also alone

    Have a great week ahead Janna,

    Eric

    • jannatwrites September 1, 2013 / 11:24 PM

      Exactly, Eric! Thanks for stopping by 🙂

  32. syllabubsea September 2, 2013 / 3:55 AM

    Love the strong image in your Haiku. Marie

    • jannatwrites September 2, 2013 / 7:43 PM

      I appreciate you stopping by to read it, Marie!

  33. Shakti Ghosal September 2, 2013 / 6:11 AM

    That is an enchanting picture. Somehow looking at it transported me to that airy fairy movement of the protagonists in that epic, ” Crouching tiger hidden dragon.”

    Could there be a haiku in that?

    Shakti

    • jannatwrites September 2, 2013 / 7:45 PM

      I think there could be haiku i just about anything! Thanks for reading, Shaki 🙂

    • jannatwrites September 2, 2013 / 8:00 PM

      Thanks, Phil. I really appreciate you reading it.

  34. pattyabr September 4, 2013 / 5:47 AM

    I love Haiku I should practice it more often. Nice Job

    • jannatwrites September 4, 2013 / 10:00 PM

      I hardly ever write it, but have done so twice in one week now 🙂 Thanks for reading, Patty!

  35. Robin Leigh Morgan July 4, 2014 / 7:16 PM

    Now that I’ve worked my way back through all of your Haiku prompts – – I can see why you like writing them. Which is probably the same reason I’ve become hooked on writing them myself. It takes a little effort to elicit some sort of emotional response form those who might read them, and it’s interesting to note the different spins which can be taken for each theme/prompt word.

    So here’s my last Haiku response to catch up to all those you’ve written

    Like Trees

    From the very top
    Following the branches down
    Family roots found.

    • jannatwrites July 5, 2014 / 1:03 AM

      Haiku are fun, Robin! Thanks for taking time to read my haiku posts. I’m glad you found some inspiration in them.

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