Spirit Renewed

I was

Depleted, barren-

Like the stoic

Guardians

Of winter.

 –

I gathered

Strength so I

May grow

Under the

Sun’s tutelage.

 –

‘Til dawn

Of December,

I’ll flourish, bask in

Soul-changing energy.

I live.

08-16 Tree

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This is my response to Trifecta’s weekend challenge, which is to: write 33 words exactly inspired by the following photo project by Eirik Solheim.  Each slice of the photo compilation is a different day of the year, taken from the same location.

This is another community-voted challenge, which means that readers have the opportunity to vote on their three favorites by visiting Trifecta’s site after the challenge closes on Sunday, at 8PM Eastern time.

Happy reading – and have a beautiful weekend!

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80 thoughts on “Spirit Renewed

  1. nrhatch August 16, 2013 / 8:57 AM

    Verdant splendor. 😎

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 12:07 PM

      Ahhh….that’s better (to quote…you!) I’m glad you stopped by, Nancy 😛

  2. suzicate August 16, 2013 / 9:17 AM

    I really like this, Janna.

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 12:07 PM

      Thanks, SuziCate! I enjoyed this prompt because I already ponder nature regularly 🙂

  3. Joe Owens August 16, 2013 / 10:38 AM

    Nice words you put with the cycle of nature.

  4. Lance August 16, 2013 / 10:49 AM

    I like the build and love the energy. well done, my friend.

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 12:09 PM

      Aw, thanks, Lance! Hope is so much brighter when seen in the darkness.

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 12:13 PM

      Thanks, Shawn! It could very well be about a tree, but it’s also about me. The guardians of winter are the leafless trees in dreariness of winter- this is how I feel sometimes. When I’m in that place, I look for the light; things that lift my spirits and I know I’ll stay there….until the gloominess comes again. My emotions are much like the seasons.

      • shawnbrucepruett August 16, 2013 / 6:03 PM

        Aren’t emotions so closely matched with the changing of seasons? The first spring blossoms, make an unbearably cold and dreary winter, seem well worth the wait!

        • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 11:03 PM

          You got that right, Shawn!

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 12:56 PM

      BTW – I read your response and tried really hard to comment, but between the captcha and Open ID errors, I failed. If you could remove captcha, and allow the name/url comment option, it would make commenting much easier 🙂

      • shawnbrucepruett August 16, 2013 / 6:00 PM

        Janna, I will poke and prod until I figure out how to remove them. Arghh! Soon, I’ll be a pro, right now, I’m doing good just posting my submission. Sorry for the inconvenience.

        • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 11:02 PM

          No worries, Shawn. I stopped back by and it looks like you got it all figured out. My comment posted without a hitch. (You’re one step closer to pro now, right? :)) I appreciate you looking into it!

  5. EagleAye August 16, 2013 / 11:49 AM

    This is really powerful. I love it!

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 12:14 PM

      Thanks so much for reading, EagleAye! I’m happy you enjoyed this piece 🙂

  6. seablackwithink August 16, 2013 / 12:01 PM

    the language ..imagery and message here are all beautiful.

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 12:16 PM

      I’m glad you enjoyed the poem, Seablackwithink. I “felt” this one, so it’s nice when others seem to as well 🙂

  7. Glynis August 16, 2013 / 12:13 PM

    Beautiful love that first stanza. Amazing piece!

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 12:22 PM

      Thanks so much, Glynis! I wanted this poem to be a process – emergence from someplace darker.

  8. lovelylici1986 August 16, 2013 / 12:24 PM

    Love this, Janna!
    I’m a tree freak and this is so well written that I had to read it again and again. 🙂
    -AA

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 12:29 PM

      Your comment made me smile, Alicia 😛 I’m so glad you stopped by to read it and liked it well enough to linger a bit. Trees are wonderful. I’m in awe of the tall, majestic ones…oh, the stories they could tell of their decades (or even hundreds) of years of life…

  9. theinnerzone August 16, 2013 / 1:01 PM

    I have read it thrice to savor all the words 🙂 Such a breathing, live entry, Janna.

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 2:40 PM

      I appreciate you taking time to read (three times) and for sharing your kind words, Theinnerzone!

  10. paulmclem August 16, 2013 / 2:37 PM

    Not going to pretend I truly ‘get’ poetry yet but this sounds lyrical which is good.

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 2:43 PM

      I’ll be honest with you Paul – I don’t “get” a lot of poetry, either. Unless the subject is obvious, I’m left confused and can only pinpoint phrases that sound good. I generally prefer to write ‘obvious’ poetry because I want readers to find their own meaning in it. This one, with the trimming, ended up being more cryptic than I prefer.

      I appreciate you taking time to read it anyway, even though poetry isn’t your bag. I think I’ll challenge myself to write a non-poetry 33-word entry next week 🙂

      • paulmclem August 16, 2013 / 2:51 PM

        I agree with the potential for confusion with some poems/poets. At times it really can just feel like a random/jarring collection of words. Some may say that’s what a poem is but I personally need more. Your work is always excellent in that it can sing to the reader at times. Good work Janna.

        • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 10:57 PM

          Not every piece will mean something to everyone, but it is nice when a reader does glean something from it 🙂

  11. Gabriella August 16, 2013 / 2:55 PM

    You commented on my last line. I love yours!

  12. vishalbheeroo August 16, 2013 / 3:02 PM

    Awesomely written, Jannat. It brings a dash of optimism bout life:)

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 10:59 PM

      Even in despair, there is room for optimism. I’m glad you stopped by, Vishal!

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 11:00 PM

      Summer does a lot of teaching (and skin baking, if we aren’t careful.) Spending so many of them in Phoenix, I have to say it’s my least favorite season. Thanks for stopping by, Phil!

  13. Valerie August 16, 2013 / 4:09 PM

    Janna, this is just gorgeous!! I love the last line-so affirming!

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 11:01 PM

      Thanks so much, Valerie. I appreciate you reading it 🙂

  14. Renada Styles August 16, 2013 / 6:03 PM

    That was absolutely lovely how you incorporated the changes of seasons with the changes of life.

    • jannatwrites August 16, 2013 / 11:03 PM

      Thanks, Renada. I’m glad you enjoyed the poem 🙂

    • jannatwrites August 17, 2013 / 9:59 PM

      I’m glad you found it so, Lena 🙂 Thanks for reading!

  15. Suzanne August 17, 2013 / 7:14 AM

    Beautiful writing Janna! Love the metaphor of the changing seasons and living your life. 🙂

    • jannatwrites August 17, 2013 / 10:00 PM

      I appreciate you reading it, Suzanne!

  16. Linda Vernon August 17, 2013 / 8:39 AM

    I live! It doesn’t get any better than that. I loved reading your poem, Janna! 😀

  17. Debbie August 17, 2013 / 10:48 AM

    Sounds like we were thinking along the same lines, Janna — well done!

    • jannatwrites August 17, 2013 / 11:42 PM

      Great minds think alike? Thanks for reading, Debbie 🙂

  18. Ye Pirate August 17, 2013 / 11:10 AM

    That last line has a sharp edge – VERY NICE FINISH

    • jannatwrites August 17, 2013 / 11:47 PM

      Thanks, Pirate…I appreciate you stopping by 🙂

  19. freyathewriter August 17, 2013 / 2:14 PM

    I adore the last line. It’s all that needs to be said.

  20. Imelda August 17, 2013 / 3:49 PM

    Your poem complements the photo well.

    • jannatwrites August 17, 2013 / 11:53 PM

      Thanks, Imelda! I actually posted this with one of my photos instead of the prompt photo. (The prompt photo is “the following photo project” link.)

  21. Eric Alagan August 17, 2013 / 7:05 PM

    Strength, determination – these words sprang to mind – plus —- cycle

    • jannatwrites August 17, 2013 / 11:55 PM

      Cycle is one of the things I was going for here. We need strength and determination to perpetuate the cycle. Thanks for stopping by, Eric!

  22. Draug419 August 17, 2013 / 8:30 PM

    This is a great poem to fit the prompt.

  23. injaynesworld August 18, 2013 / 8:52 AM

    “… barren. Like the stoic guardians of winter.” Wow! Now that’s a powerful sentence. Beautiful piece. I, too, am constantly inspired by nature.

    • jannatwrites August 18, 2013 / 8:21 PM

      Thanks, Jayne! I’m glad you could relate to the poem. I appreciate you reading it!

  24. Christine August 18, 2013 / 1:07 PM

    I really, really love the middle stanza in particular. Beautiful writing, Janna!

    • jannatwrites August 18, 2013 / 8:27 PM

      Thanks so much for reading, Christine! I’m glad you liked that part.

  25. pattisj August 18, 2013 / 1:47 PM

    I feel the same way when December rolls around. Lovely prose.

    • jannatwrites August 18, 2013 / 8:28 PM

      Winter is beautiful, but it can be gloomy, too. Thanks for reading, Patti!

  26. Sarah Ann August 18, 2013 / 2:09 PM

    Beautiful. Love the ‘stoic guardians’ and ‘sun’s tutelage’. A wonderful interpretation of the prompt.

    • jannatwrites August 18, 2013 / 8:29 PM

      Thanks so much, Sarah Ann. I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂

  27. chloeaevm August 18, 2013 / 7:21 PM

    I love your opening line. Something about it just holds so much emotion.

    • jannatwrites August 18, 2013 / 8:30 PM

      Thank you, Chloe! I appreciate you stopping by 🙂

  28. Mike August 19, 2013 / 12:59 AM

    A beautiful poem. Captures this weekend’s prompt so well.

    • jannatwrites August 19, 2013 / 9:58 PM

      Thanks, Mike…I appreciate you reading it!

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