Idiom Inspired

Two doors closed, I quiver on third’s threshold, figuratively naked-

Vulnerable,

While he escaped through an unlocked window into her waiting arms.

Resumé in hand, confidence abandoned, I wait-

Pray,

For fabled charm.

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This is my response to Trifecta’s weekend writing prompt:

TrifectaPicture11-1This weekend we’re asking for 33 of your own words inspired by the idiom,
third time’s the charm.  This familiar phrase may have an indeterminate
origin, but its meaning is clear.  Whether or not you include the phrase itself
is up to you.  Just make sure to use exactly 33 words.

If you want to read other responses, or submit your own, click the tricycle picture to view Trifecta’s site.  Have a wonderful weekend!

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50 thoughts on “Idiom Inspired

  1. nrhatch June 21, 2013 / 10:32 AM

    Nice! Welcome back! Hope you had a blast in DC. 😀

    • nrhatch June 21, 2013 / 12:09 PM

      Oh, I forgot to share how I first read this title . . . “Idiot Inspired.” I figured you had met some real bozos in D.C. 😆

      • jannatwrites June 21, 2013 / 10:30 PM

        Haha! I did run into a few idiots, but that would be a different post entirely 😆

    • jannatwrites June 21, 2013 / 10:29 PM

      Thanks, Nancy! It was a good trip…but so nice to be home 🙂

    • jannatwrites June 21, 2013 / 10:30 PM

      I appreciate you taking time to read and comment, Vishal!

  2. GodGirl June 21, 2013 / 3:33 PM

    “I quiver on third’s threshold”…. Wow, that’s wonderful.

    • jannatwrites June 21, 2013 / 10:31 PM

      Thanks so much, GodGirl – I’m glad you liked that line 🙂

  3. barbara June 21, 2013 / 11:08 PM

    figuratively naked . . . resume in hand . . . aha! Well done.

  4. pattyabr June 22, 2013 / 7:39 AM

    nice job.
    so you’re back from DC can hardly wait to hear of your adventures!

    • jannatwrites June 23, 2013 / 12:41 AM

      Yes, I’m back! It will take a bit to get my thoughts and photos together, but I’m sure I’ll do a few DC posts, Patty 🙂

  5. Suzanne June 22, 2013 / 10:41 AM

    Oh Janna, this is gorgeous! So much emotion and depth in this piece. Love the opening and closing lines in particular. Well done!

    • jannatwrites June 23, 2013 / 12:42 AM

      Thanks for reading and for your encouraging comment, Suzanne. I’m glad you enjoyed this piece!

    • jannatwrites June 23, 2013 / 12:44 AM

      Thanks, Renee. I’m glad the emotion came through.

  6. Ann Bennett (@AnnBennett12) June 22, 2013 / 4:09 PM

    I like this. I like the humanity of the person wanting a positive response that is never coming. We have all had this experience.

    • jannatwrites June 23, 2013 / 12:45 AM

      We have to have hope…whether it takes three tries, or thirty-three 🙂 I appreciate you stopping by, Ann!

  7. Draug419 June 22, 2013 / 5:34 PM

    Very cool. I like the little metaphors and such (:

  8. trifectawriting June 22, 2013 / 6:38 PM

    That first line–fantastic! Thank you for linking up!

    • jannatwrites June 23, 2013 / 12:46 AM

      I’m glad you liked it – I actually thought of this when I was driving to work and scrawled it out in my pocket notebook 🙂

  9. freyathewriter June 23, 2013 / 5:31 AM

    Lovely. The word that came to mind for this was ‘delicate’ (which is a compliment, by the way!).

    • jannatwrites June 25, 2013 / 10:44 PM

      Thanks so much, Freyathewriter! I appreciate you stopping by to read it 🙂

  10. Valerie June 23, 2013 / 7:25 AM

    This was a perfectly sketched picture of the perils of opening one’s heart. I felt her vulnerability, and my own heart aches, and hopes for her! Brilliant!

    • jannatwrites June 25, 2013 / 10:45 PM

      I’m glad this evoked emotions when you read it, Valerie. Thanks for sharing your thoughts!

  11. deanabo June 23, 2013 / 8:46 AM

    You have a terrific way with your words.

    • jannatwrites June 25, 2013 / 10:45 PM

      I appreciate the compliment, Deana. Thanks 🙂

  12. Steph June 23, 2013 / 11:52 AM

    Confidence abandoned.. fabled charm.. lovely and sad. Nice piece!

    • jannatwrites June 25, 2013 / 10:46 PM

      Thanks for taking time to read it and share your thoughts, Steph!

  13. Lumdog June 24, 2013 / 5:31 AM

    “Figuratively naked” is so descriptive. It sets the stage perfectly for this piece. Well done.

    • jannatwrites June 25, 2013 / 10:47 PM

      Thanks, Lumdog. I’m not sure why that phrase came to mind when I wrote it, but as soon as it came out, I knew it would have to stay.

  14. Kir Piccini June 24, 2013 / 9:19 AM

    oh that third time, the one that counts right? And we stand and wait on it, hope still lingering, clinging to us like morning dew.

    this was beautiful, as your words often are. 🙂

    glad you’re back!!

    • jannatwrites June 25, 2013 / 10:48 PM

      ‘Clinging to us like morning dew’ – nice phrase, Kir! Thanks for reading and for leaving your wonderful comment 🙂

  15. Eric Alagan June 24, 2013 / 5:43 PM

    How did I miss this one? Anyway, glad that I caught up 🙂

    • jannatwrites June 25, 2013 / 10:49 PM

      I’m glad you stepped back to read it, Eric! I’m still behind on reading, so I can understand perfectly how a post could me missed here and there 🙂

  16. philosophermouseofthehedge June 25, 2013 / 11:26 AM

    A fine ballet of words excellently staged
    (trying to catch up with my reading – so behind…but it’s summer!)

    • jannatwrites June 25, 2013 / 10:50 PM

      I hear you, Phil. I whittled down over two hundred emails to around 75 since I got back from vacation. Thanks for taking time to read and share your opinion!

  17. Diane Turner June 27, 2013 / 7:54 PM

    Excellent piece, but that first line is dynamite. Thanks for sharing.

    • jannatwrites June 27, 2013 / 11:31 PM

      Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment, Diane!

  18. humanTriumphant June 28, 2013 / 6:57 AM

    what a great place to come in for a 3rd charming story – congrats!

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