“Two coffees, black, and one water in a warmed glass with no ice and two wedges of lemon,” Darlene said as she handed the FBI agents coffee, and the water to Mrs. Crawford. Though grateful that Myrtle saved her life, she couldn’t help but think that the picky drink order suited her personality well.
“Mrs. Crawford, think back to last night. Tell us everything you remember.”
Darlene leaned back in the chair. This will take a while.
Myrtle closed her eyes. Her breathing slowed and a slight smile tugged on one corner of her mouth. Each hand rested on a knee, palm up with her index finger and thumb touching.
The agents leaned forward in anticipation, pens ready above steno pads.
Darlene sipped her own glass of water in hopes of averting laughter.
After two minutes, the younger agent, Haversill, looked to the more seasoned agent. Mulroney shook his head. They waited.
Darlene wondered if Myrtle was summoning the gods of gossip to help her recall details that no mortal person could possibly remember. The expression on her face made it look like she’d entered some kind of ecstasy or enlightenment.
“My knee hurt so I had gone to bed early. My left knee always aches during monsoon weather,” Myrtle said in a low voice.
They asked for everything, Darlene thought.
Twenty-five minutes later, Myrtle opened her eyes, her recollection of last night complete. She winked at Mulroney. “You boys are even more handsome up close.”
“Oh, uh. Okay,” Agent Mulroney said.
“I-I found something that might help you.”
Both agents turned to Darlene.
She drew out her exhale and then handed them the paper she’d lifted from Jeff’s pocket when he was unconscious on the floor of her cabin. She kept a copy in her pocket.
Mulroney took the paper and unfolded it. He stared, brow furrowed. Several minutes passed before he showed a flicker of understanding. “Where did you get this?”
Darlene sighed. “It’s a long story.”
“This is key evidence.”
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This is my response to the Trifecta weekly challenge, which is to write a 33 to 333-word response (mine is 333- again) using the following word/definition:
ECSTASY (noun): trance; especially: a mystic or prophetic trance
If you want to read other responses, or try the challenge yourself, click on the tricycle picture to view Trifecta’s site. Happy writing (and reading!)
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This continues Darlene’s story (if you haven’t read the other parts and are curious about what has transpired so far, here are the links:)
First Part (Dead Flowers) Second Part (Investigation) Third Part (Unknown Path)
Fourth Part (Missing) Fifth Part (Facing Memories) Sixth Part (Hunted or Hunter?)
Seventh Part (Indecision) Eighth Part (Ties That Bind) Ninth Part (Skeletons)
Tenth Part (Truth or Lies) Eleventh Part (Rain) Twelfth Part (Neighborhood’s Watch)
I would enjoy reading more of this story.
Thank you so much for stopping by to read it, The Real Cie. I’ve been adding to the story each week for many weeks now…hope you do come back to read more 🙂
I’m keeping up with it!
Thank, Yerpirate 🙂
Myrtle is cracking me up!
I’m glad she’s entertaining, HT. She’s becoming a bigger part of the story than I thought when I first introduced her early on. I guess that’s what happens when the story is run by prompts 🙂
I’m often amazed at how some particular character can grab a story before you’ve even realized what he/she has done. It’s fascinating.
It really is fun when that happens, HT 🙂
I love that Myrtle is messing with them and flirting!
She’s a bold one, Jennifer! She likes the attention and will milk it however she can.
Myrtle is very mindful. 😉
Still loving it!
She is…something else, Nancy! I’m glad you are liking this story. Now, if I could only figure out an ending 😀
I would hate to be interrogating someone like that… love her cool attitude.. but I guess yoga is good to know.
She would probably toy with you, Bjorn! Good thing she only exists in the story 🙂
Starting with these little sensory exact details! “Two coffees, black, and one water in a warmed glass with no ice and two wedges of lemon,” Excellent way to draw reader in.
And describing the way she sips her water to keep from laughing
What a hilarious scene you painted.
And then that few lines with the big ending.
wonderful read for a Monday, thanks
Your comment made my day, Phil! (Not bad for a Monday :)) Thanks for taking the time to point out what parts of the story you liked best. I’ve been trying to pay attention to opening lines- to make them interesting, so I’m pleased that this one worked for you.
Loving Myrtle!
Thanks, Widdershins! My goal this week is to get that page set up…I’ll check the page set up on your blog first, though.
I love Darlene and Myrtle. Great story
Thanks, Tessa! I appreciate you reading the story. I’m sure there will be more Myrtle…if she has anything to say about it.
The gods of gossip seem like they’d be interesting deities. 😛
No one knows those gods better than Myrtle (except maybe her friend, Mrs. Anderson.)
Great work
I appreciate you reading, Ruby!
Nice spirit work 😉 Cool continuation!
This word definition didn’t come easily for me. Thanks for continuing to read the story, Draug!
I absolutely love Myrtle! 😉
🙂 Thanks, Dianne! I’m sure she’ll be back soon.
I enjoyed that “Myrtle” scene – you squeezed that out well Janna and brought out a chuckle. I think that “Myrtle” character has a lot of meat and don’t be surprised that sometimes a supporting character actually steals the thunder. Very well written. Thanks, Eric
Your comment is funny because as I wrote this, more possibilities came to mind where Myrtle is a bit more than a side dish. I really should be plotting this out…I’m having a heck of time remembering the bread crumbs I’ve left so far! Thanks for your comment, Eric 🙂
Love your characterization of Myrtle! Now I wonder how many parts this story will in fact end up with, as it gets more intriguing and better with each “part”!
I’ve been thinking about how to ‘end’ the blog version of the story so I can do the bigger story and not have the entire plot revealed. I’ve got nothing so far 🙂 I’m going to see if I can wrap it up in the next few weeks.
Turning into a novel, hm?
Ha, just about (but not intentionally.) It’s a fun story to write, though 🙂
Maybe you wanna publish it when its done? You can self-publish, maybe. Why not. Might be worth a try. You should do it.
It’s something I’m thinking about, Scriptor. We’ll see 🙂
I wanted to read the note, too! 🙂
I ran out of words, Patti, so it had to wait. Rules are rules 🙂
Bummer!
🙂
I love Myrtle and think I know a few Myrtles. 🙂
Thanks for reading, Judith. I’m glad you like Myrtle- she’s been fun to write 🙂
The detail in this is terrific. Loving it.
Thanks so much for reading, Sandra!
Darlene had a bit of fun today. Love Myrtle summoning the gods of gossip.
I’m glad you liked that part, Kymm. Thanks for stopping by!
I love the way you sum Myrtle up in her drink order. I thought I was picky too. It says so much about her so quickly! 😀
Thanks, Linda. I’m glad that line has served its purpose!
Darlene and Myrtle make a great duo, Janna. Keep up the good work!
Thanks for the encouragement, Debbie. I appreciate you following the story 🙂
Love the way you leave us with a cliffhanger with each 333 words. Well done! The story is involving. I’m no different from anyone else – I want more!
It is so encouraging to read comments that you want to see more of the story, Steph. Thanks for continuing to follow along!
The water in a warmed glass with lemon, what a way to build character. I’m glad you put links for the other parts of the story.
Thanks for taking the time to leave your comment on the story, Ann!
Love the details – the picky drink is so revelatory of character – great work
Thanks, Thomas – I appreciate you reading the story,
Myrtle is a great character. Her quirky mannerisms are a fun addition to the story.
Thanks, Tara! She was unexpected, but I’m having fun with her 🙂
A nice, tight, little scene. I like it!
Yay! I’m glad you liked this part, Connor!
You are a very talented and creative writer…Diane
I appreciate your kind compliment, Diane – thank you 🙂
Oh Myrtle and that troublesome knee of hers! What a great character! I love this story, too!
🙂 I’m sure they got much more than they expected in the questioning. I’m glad you’re liking the story, Valerie – thanks for reading!
A nice balance of description and narration. Looking forward to more!
Thanks for continuing to keep up with the story, Allen!
I love the bit of humor that mitigated the suspense. Nice gripping writng, Janna. 🙂
I think I was in a bit of a silly mood when I wrote this, Imelda. I’m glad the humor came across, even though a visit from the FBI is a serious thing L)
I giggled a little myself about her sipping her water to avert laughter. I could picture it and Myrtle. 🙂 very good!!
I like that it got a reaction from you, Donetta! Thanks for leaving your thoughts here 🙂
Your “breadcrumbs” are more appetizing than some fully baked loaves. Enjoyable reading!
Your comment made me happy, Joanne! I’m really glad you are liking the story 😀
Loving this story Janna! That Myrtle is hilarious — “summoning the gods of gossip” is priceless! Can’t wait to see what happens next.
Thanks so much for reading, Suzanne! I appreciate you continuing to follow the story week after week 🙂
Love this story. So well written. Your description of Myrtke was just perfect too! 🙂
🙂 I’m glad you are liking the story, Lumdog. I’ll try to keep it interesting 🙂
Once again, I love Myrtle! And, key evidence? I missed the lifting from Jeff’s pocket. I’ll have to go back and read again. So that I’m ready for the next part.
She took some papers and keys in part 7 when she was searching for Jeff’s ID (I had to re-read some of it to remember that.) It’s so hard to remember details when the story is strung out over many weeks. I appreciate you reading, Renee.
“gods of gossip” – nice line!
Thanks! Appreciate you stopping by 🙂
So many good lines. I’m almost caught up with this story. I like Darlene’s personality. You write her with such a natural appeal. I feel like I know her. More please.
Thanks, Lance! I’m glad that Darlene is believable and that you are liking the story. I appreciate you keeping up with the story.
I need to remember to take the time to go back through and read all of the parts.
I’m glad you stopped by, Jennifer. Thanks for taking time to read!