Saturday Serial Substitute…Pitiful Poetry?

Since I’ve suspended Saturday Morning Serial for a couple weeks, I’m substituting the story for some poetry that I wrote this past week.  If you’re interested, the fourth part to my humorous suspense short story, Kharma’s Way, has been posted on Serial Central.  (All of the previous posts are always available, too).  In part 4, Jaime travels from Santa Fe to Phoenix in search of Gill.  Find out if luck finally goes her way, or if she finds more trouble instead.

I have just one warning before moving on to poetry:  the two poems have very different tones and probably don’t belong in the same post (but they promised to play nice).


Late at night,

I sneak into bed.

You open your eyes,

Like you know where I’ve been.

I lean in for a kiss,

But instead get a glare;

And then a twitch –

Oh, what an angry stare.

Too late, I grasp

My careless goof:

I’ve held other cats;

I’ve been untrue.

You are still queen,

Please don’t stay mad.

(I cannot believe

I beg forgiveness of a cat.)

Please forgive me!


In Disguise    


          The polished façade,

          His calm demeanor;

          The friendly nod,

          Lurks a stranger.


          Below the surface,

          Ripples of anger;

          Happiness displaced,

          He blames the world.


          By his fake smile,

          Behind his charm;

          Evil thrives,

          Bent on harm.


          The label of society,

          Preordained fate;

          The burden he carries,

          A message of hate.


6 thoughts on “Saturday Serial Substitute…Pitiful Poetry?

  1. Maimoona Rahman September 18, 2010 / 5:02 AM

    Awww, what lovely poetry. The first one is splendid. Your cat is so cute. My cats are asleep, so I’m just going to stare at yours.

    • jannatwrites September 18, 2010 / 7:16 AM

      Thanks Maimoona! I’m glad you enjoyed them. I can just stare at pictures of cats, too. Their faces are toooooo cute 🙂

  2. darksculptures September 18, 2010 / 6:31 AM

    Oh the number of times I have pleaded for forgiveness from one of my dogs for having loved on the other. You captured that feeling well.

    The second poem I think was my favorite. I’ve read it three times and each time considered it with new meaning. I like poetry that makes you dig down and think, like that. Thank you for sharing.

    • jannatwrites September 18, 2010 / 7:20 AM

      Animals don’t speak our language, but they sure know how to get a point across, don’t they? I’ve dealt with miffed dogs, too…but they get over it faster than cats (in my experience). I’m happy the second one sparked your interest; it’s darker than most of the ones I write. It’s fascinating that you find several meanings because I had multiple thoughts in my head when I wrote it…maybe you’re picking up on that. Whew! Too much analysis on a Saturday morning 🙂

  3. Miss Rosemary September 18, 2010 / 5:30 PM

    Oh I love the one about the cat!

    • jannatwrites September 18, 2010 / 6:07 PM

      Thanks, Miss Rosemary. My kitty does get upset with me 🙂

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